Am I supposed to be full of rage
simply because challenges intend to doom?
No, not someone at my age,
Words won’t sweep my dreams to a tomb,
I know I have to watch for sighs,
Someone stay high with showing breast,
Others get attention with neat thighs,
I’m myself, not melting in the west,
I won’t be mad
When people send me their blues,
I do enjoy wearing a skirt with pattern plaid,
And having a comfortable pair of shoes.
I fear nothing, if I fail,
I won’t wail in the mail.
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sharing it with Poetry Potluck at Jingle Poetry Week 46 today!
NaPoWriMo: http://www.napowrimo.net/ (Day 23)
Today’s prompt is to write a bouts-rimes. The bouts-rimes is a sort of poetic parlor game: you write a poem using the rhyming end words from another poem. They’re usually done with sonnets in English. So today we are asked to write a bouts-rimes sonnet, using the end words from either K. Silem Mohammad’s poemYou White White Teatime Teen, which was itself constructed anagrammatically from Shakespeare’sSonnet VI, or from Robert Frost’s The Silken Tent. So my end words are the following, I wrote my poem in 5 minutes, trying to end up with the requested words.
rage, doom, age, tomb , sighs, breast, thighs, west, mad, blues, plaid, shoes, fail, mail
Beautiful words….
Say, your poem is encouraging especially about words are not going to sweep dreams to tombs…
That reaches my heart, telling me I should not allow it too.. 🙂 *HUG* a beautiful write..
Words of spirit and determination. Nice poem, Jingle. Blessings to you…
Positive outlook prresented here.
well crafted one jingle.
this is a strong one…
Well done and good attitude! I like my plaids and comfy shoes too… Poem on, Ji.
I love bouts-rhyme poems. You’ve done well; it displays personal strength.
nicely done – resolve is a strong attribute to have
I read purpose, strength and a strong spirit 🙂 well done!
enjoy the potluck!!!
http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/07/29/ever-after/
very powerful feeling and words. awesome.
Shows character and strength. Great write.
I admire that you stick to your principles and maintain an even keel.
Good thoughts here, lovely.
how you conveyed your strength and determination while incorporating the required words and maintaining the form is amazing, Jingle! ♥
I also like comfortable shoes. Living life to please one’s self gives us fuel to feed others our happiness. 🙂
The right thing to do is keeping your own dreams alive… 🙂
nice one.
certainly we all need this strenght to overcome lives unexpectancy’s..
Love the message of determination and strength, and you have said it very well! Nice work, Jingle!
I love this piece!!!!! this weeks theme seems to be one relatable to everyone!
You’ve encouraged me not to let my writing challenges defeat me. I love this challenge, really clever prompt.
A fitting reply to a challenge.
I like the disconnect that you have in this verse and then the attachment you are showing in the end… I could relate to it… Thanks for sharing these wonderful lines…
‘I do enjoy wearing a skirt with pattern plaid,
And having a comfortable pair of shoes’
Shashi
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2010/05/whispers.html
You’ve done it again, Ji.
Always a pillar of strength & encouragement.
Thank you!
Kind of a fun exercise, there, and fun to read, too.
Funny thing is, the poem works really well, and somehow really seems to be coming from you, even though the target words are probably also giving it some of the vibe of the verses they came from, which I’ll guess, without having checked to see.
Somehow, I really like the plaid skirt and comfortable shoes. Also, “words won’t sweep my dreams into a tomb.
the poem comes to me within 10 minutes, it writes itself when I stare at the words provided, trying to plot a story with poetic and rhyming senses.
thanks for the deep thoughts on it.
🙂